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There are many reasons that can motivate a person to stay working for the same company. Some believe that money is the main reason. Do you agree or disagree? What are some other reasons why people may stay?

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The majority of our waking hours are spent at our place of business.
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, it is paramount that a person
be
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is
 happy where he works. For some people, the key to
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 happiness is adequate monetary compensation. In fact, they may remain in a position they do not enjoy solely for the purpose of
money
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. I believe that people who follow
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 model are in the minority and by and large when people choose to remain at their companies, it is for reasons other than salary.
Money
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 is rarely the reason why people remain at a
company
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. In fact,
money
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 is typically the reason why people leave. It is frequently easier for job seekers to negotiate a higher salary at a different
company
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 eager to hire them than it is to get a similar pay rise at the current place of employment. For
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 reason, people in search of higher positions and higher compensation, generally make strategic decisions regarding their career moves and rarely stay in the same
company
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 for a sizable period of their career.
Money
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 aside, remaining at a
company
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 for a lengthy period of time may be of benefit to some. There are those who find the stress of changing companies overwhelming and prefer to remain in familiar territory. These are people who typically relish routine and dread the unknown. Others may gain
benefits
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the benefits
 of a different nature from staying
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in
 the same
company
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. If the location is ideal, the
benefits extraordinary
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benefits, extraordinary
 or colleagues exemplary,
money
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 may not provide enough of a temptation to leave. Of course for some,
money
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 is nothing more than a necessary evil and they would never dream of factoring it into the equation of pursuing a new position.
Clearly in
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Clearly, in
 the working world,
money
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 is a primary factor for some. People will accept or reject opportunities based on it. For others, a different ideology will lead their careers. Each chooses his
path hoping
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path, hoping
 always for the best.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fulfillment
  • employee retention
  • professional development
  • telecommuting
  • competitive salary
  • health benefits
  • retirement plans
  • supportive management
  • workplace satisfaction
  • loyalty
  • job security
  • employee turnover
  • personal values
  • career ladder
  • workplace dynamics
  • loyal to an employer
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