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Question: Many people believe that the current system of both teachers and students in the classroom will no longer exist by the year 2050. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

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The existence of
teachers
 and students together in a
classroom
 in the next 30 years is debatable. Some people claim that by 2050 the conventional
classroom
 concept of learners and educators under one roof will be completely transformed. I totally disagree with
this
 statement for
few
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 reasons like
teachers
 are essential for
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guidance and motivation.
Firstly
, these lectures will always guide the pupils in the proper direction.
However
, computers may give all the choices, but
it
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 cannot insist a learner
to
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follow the right path.
Further
,
teachers
 being the pedagogical experts teach pupils in an interesting manner.
In addition
, students can interact with them and discuss complex subjects
nevertheless
, any number of online tuitions may not simplify the concepts.
For instance
, despite significant research in the category of medical sciences
till
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 there is no substitute for blood.
Similarly
, by 2050 there may be a number of innovations in the field of education,
however
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 it cannot replace a teacher.
Secondly
, these mentors are the best motivators. They can be an inspiration for a
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 student because they can understand their weak areas and encourage them to overcome their shortfalls.
Therefore
, it is possible only by interacting in a
classroom
 between learners and educators.
For example
, I always wanted to become a professor since my childhood because of the influence of my primary
teachers
. So
this
 concept of motivation can only be possible if there is a healthy interaction with the schools.
To conclude
,
although
 there might be considerable changes in the system of education by the year 2050
still
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classroom
 learning with a lecturer and a pupil cannot be substituted. A student cannot achieve anything without guidance and motivation from a mentor.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • virtual reality
  • augmented reality
  • traditional teaching methods
  • personalized learning
  • AI (Artificial Intelligence)
  • global connectivity
  • online platforms
  • obsolete
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • digital classrooms
  • economic factors
  • maintaining physical school buildings
  • online learning environments
  • social interaction
  • practical learning experiences
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