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Some people think that teachers should be responsible for teaching students to judge right and wrong and to behave well. Some say that teachers should only teach students about academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Education plays an important role in a
child
's life. It
maybe
Suggestion
may be
 academic or life skills. Some people claim that teachers should
further
 educate children in moral values while others think only academic education should be taught by the educator.
This
 essay will discuss both views of the statement. On the one hand, a student spends 8 hours a day in school and is in contact with teachers almost half the day. As a teacher the valuable knowledge
that is
 imparted to the children is during
this
 period is important.
For example
, the educator can advise the
child
 if he or she is not showing empathy towards another
student
Suggestion
Student
.
Therefore
, a good teacher should be an all rounder who is able to teach not only the subjects but additional good values and discipline
On the other hand
, there is so much stress on teachers to cover the subject syllabus on time that most often teachers do not need the additional workload.
For instance
, a government school
teachers
Suggestion
teacher
 in Malaysia teaches 45 minutes each subject for 8 classes per day. She has no time to oversee a
child
's behaviour and correct it. Parents and caregivers should be responsible to correct and discipline the
child
. In my opinion, teachers, parents
are
introduces an alternative
or
caregivers
 should be responsible to nurture and discipline the
child
.
Although
 academic studies
is
Suggestion
are
 important moral values are equally important to shape the
child
 into a better human being.
This
 is made possible by the people who spend most of their time with the children. In conclusion, as teaching is a noble job both teachers and parents should do their part to ensure that a
child
's education is wholesome and not one sided.
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