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With recent developments in technology like e-books, some people fell that printed media like books, newspapers, and magazines will soon be a thing of the past. Others believe that these forms of media will never disappear.

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In
new era
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the new era
, technology is growing at a pace. Every single day something new is comping up which helps
human
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humanity
 to live an
ease
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easy
easier
 life.
In
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On
 today’s topic, we will discuss about the recent developments like e-books, how soon they will make the newspapers, magazines materials disappear. While others believe that these types of publishing will never expire. With the scientific research, person life is becoming much
easy
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easier
. We don’t need to rely on anyone until and unless we have computers and smart phones with us.
For instance
, if we have
good android phone
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a good android phone
 with a good internet connection, we can search anything, anywhere at any time. We have so many good applications developed which provide us the latest books at a reasonable price. We have newspaper and magazine application
also
 which
give
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gives
 the current update of the market
that is
 going in the world. Within the fraction of minutes, every small news is getting
refresh
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refreshed
 on the websites. In terms of education, many students tend to download the e-books as they are much cheaper.
On the other hand
, some people are against it. They don’t want these kind of media to dissolve. There
are
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is
 some disadvantage of having the online stuff. The appearance of
electronic device
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an electronic device
such
 as brightness which can hurt the eyes, if reading for long.
Moreover
, other symptoms
such
 as migraine problems and neck pain are caused from using electronic devices. From my perspective, I will recommend to use the digital material.
Firstly
 financially it is not expensive as we just need to have a good internet connection. No longer need to carry books and other reading stuff. In conclusion, the revolution brings many benefits to our lifestyle, but has drawbacks
also
. The internet can provide us all the material, which makes our life easier, but using them for long can lead to many health issues.

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