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Some people believe that we cannot learn anything from the past for our life today, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information to understand human's life. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #life #history #source #information
The evolution of
life
 is a structured phenomena which had
occured
come to pass
occurred
, for nearly a billion years from now. It is a complex transformation, that we have evolved right from the homo
sapien our
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sapiens, our
sapiens our
sharpen our
anchestor
someone from whom you are descended (but usually more remote than a grandparent)
ancestors
ancestor
 to a fully developed human race that we are today. The human has fully evolved in its physical and mental stage, he might not be physically strong
enough but
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enough, but
 he is definitely mentally strong, because of which he is a dominant species of
this
 world. Our
anchestors
someone from whom you are descended (but usually more remote than a grandparent)
ancestors
ancestor
has lived
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have lived
lived
 their
life
 and have learnt about
this
 world much better than we have learnt it till date. We are lucky enough that all the experience of their
life
is been preserved
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has been preserved
is being preserved
 and stored for our reference. The
vedic
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Vedic
 maths is still the best version of solving any mathematical problems and is used in many computers which are the innovation of the present. The progress in the space science is
also
 referred from the ancient
astrology which
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astrology, which
 was written thousand of
year
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years
 before. I am convinced that the future innovations are
next
 to impossible without
reffering
something offered (as a proposal or bid)
offering
 the history. One can only reach to the top of his
life
 or occupation, only if he has learnt from its history.

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