An increasing number of children are overweight which could result many problems when they grow older both in terms of their health and health care costs. Why do you think so many children are overweight? What could be done to solve this problem?

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These days,

issue

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the issue

of the obesity among the minor is increasing throughout the globe. The burgeon figure of little ones being

heavy

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heavily

weighted which would have detrimental effects on their health and

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finance of treatment will get them in trouble in future. There are several reasons why

child

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a child

are

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fat.

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, there are some solutions that I can propose.

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essay will discuss the reasons behind my perception and justification in the ensuing paragraphs.

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with, there are

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a number

of causes for the proliferation of overweight youth in the society. The

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and the foremost one is, eating a

redudant

more than is needed, desired, or required

redundant

amount of junk

food

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. To explain

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, nowadays, most of the parents do not prepare

food

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at home

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because of

their hectic schedule. So, innocents do not have any other option. To survive, they visit various cafeterias

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Mcdonalds

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McDonalds

, Dominos and many more.

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, by consuming

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food

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, they

grow their

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grow, their

weight and after that, they started having some issues in their body.

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, according to one survey, done by 'World Health Organization', around 80% of youngsters are

obessed

having or showing excessive or compulsive concern with something

obsessed

abused

obese

in my country due to junk

food

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, there are several actions, that can be taken to dwindle

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Firstly

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, parents should initiate providing them a healthy diet. To be more clear, as father and mother will buy green vegetables from market to feed their children, they would avoid eating junk

food

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this

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will help them to save themselves by various complications in

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the body

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, they should start doing sports and

excersise

the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit

exercise

exercises

. To elucidate

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, guardians must make a timetable for their child. To illustrate

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, only 1 hour should be

spend

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spent

on technology and remaining free hours

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excersise

the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit

exercise

and sports in order to stay fit. To conclude,

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essay explained not only the grounds of why teens these days are out size, but

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some remedies to diminish

these trend

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this trend

these trends

. In my opinion, elders should get more involved in respect to keep their child fit and healthy.

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Supported main points

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