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In many countries, people have health issues because they choose to live in unhealthy ways. What do you think the reason for this and how can it be solved

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Nowadays due
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Nowadays, due
 poor
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
 people are facing various health issues. In
this
 essay I will discuss the causes for becoming unfit and suggest the solutions to improve
this
. With
advancement
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the advancement
 of technology had made our
life
 very easy and we have nothing to do. And as
result our
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result, our
 most of
work
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the work
 are done by machines and with
help
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the help
 of technology.
Moreover
 sedentary
life
 style had made us obese and
.
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.
Furthermore
 junk fast food parlour ubiquitous
nowadays which
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nowadays, which
 has mouth watering taste and available in very cheap price. So as
result obesity
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result, obesity
 and
calories develops
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calories, develop
calories develop
 in
body
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the body
a body
 which
incure
make oneself subject to; bring upon oneself; become liable to
incur
 incurable
aliment
an often persistent bodily disorder or disease; a cause for complaining
ailment
 like cardiac, diabetes and blood pressure.
Moreover unwanted
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Moreover, unwanted
 advertisement of unhealthy fast food has created
unhealthy issue
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an unhealthy issue
. Lack of
excersise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
 due change in
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
 has
also
 created health concern To resolve
this
 problem
by
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with
 lots of
excersise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
 and proper healthy diet one should follow.
Also
 Government should
banned
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ban
 unhealthy advert which is harmfully to health
instead
 of exposing
healthy advertisement
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the healthy advertisement
 for
eg
animal reproductive body consisting of an ovum or embryo together with nutritive and protective envelopes; especially the thin-shelled reproductive body laid by e.g. female birds
egg
mc
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Mc
MC
 Donald's
instead
 of
perceiveing
to become aware of through the senses
perceiving
 unhealthy burger has to promote healthy
bananas
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banana
 chips. By doing
excersise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
exercises
 we can keep our body fit. By concluding we can say proper healthy diet , avoiding junk fast food keeps away the doctor

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