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Do you think that technological advancement has brought more harm than good? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

#advancement #harm #support
It is undeniable fact that the technologies have been developing day by day and it has changed the society and lifestyles of people enormously in
significant way
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significant ways
a significant way
. While, it is argued that improvements and developments in technologies have been brutal for the society and for people than better. Here
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would like to account more advantages than its drawbacks with my own perceptions. There are manifold points
to endorse
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endorsing
 the magnificent side of technological advancement.
First
 and foremost, a remarkable difference can be seen between
todays's
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today's
 communication methods and a few
decade
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decades
 ago. To demonstrate, today's communication methods are more efficient and rapid. The development of mobile phones with different applications like messenger,
viber
a slender and greatly elongated substance capable of being spun into yarn
fibre
Viber
viper
, what's app e.t.c. People can
make
engage in
do
 distance communication with their loved ones without face to face contact. As an evidence of
this
, students who live in abroad for their higher studies can
do
engage in
make
 video calls with their family. They do not feel alone and can have
family environment
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a family environment
 through video calls. The development of
internet
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the internet
 makes
people life
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a person's life
person's life
peoples' life
 more convenient and efficient.
For example
, people can delve any topics
in
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on
 the internet related to their
works
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work
 and education. They should not be anxious about any unfamiliar topics. Despite, the technological advancement has drawbacks too. People using computer consistently can have health problems like back pain, headache and eye problem.
In addition
 to that, people can be caused by obesity problem due to lack
of of
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
 physical exercises. Because of technological advancement, they should not get out
from
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of
 their room and all necessary things are accessible in their room. In conclusion, I think technological development has many benefits for people in their study, works and in entertainment too. But it is clear that, using computers can create different health problems. People should take advantages of
growing technology
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the growing technology
 in
right ways
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the right ways
 without putting themselves in danger road.

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