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Some people think that charity organisations should offer help only to people of their own countries. But other think that these organisations should give aid to people in great need where ever they live. Discuss both the views and provide your opinion.

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In recent times, some bitter life experiences has proved to be heavy in some people, who believed adopting good habitual deeds like setting up a charitable trust is the only way out of
this
. While some are more inclined towards helping people out of their own nation due to limited finances, others tend to extend their help internationally due to their trust in humanity. As there are several significant reasons for having a zoning restriction, our primary focus is mainly on inhibited money. To elaborate
further
, with fast-paced lifestyle highly influencing the mankind, a plethora of people turns a blind-eye towards donations.
As a result
 of
this
, the charitable trusts invest its own budget with a little government's help to run their organisations, which highly prohibits these agencies to extend global help.
For instance
, taking India as an example, 80% of poor people in India acclaimed that the trustees who aids them takes up their own economical overhead with little or no intervention from the authorities. On the flip side, some of the trusts which have a colossal helping hand reaches out to under-privileged people globally.
Moreover
, these organisations which enforces their trust in humanity, does not feel reluctant to touch every soul which is in dire need for help.
For example
, speaking of Mother Teresa, she was born in a foreign land, but still extended her uninterrupted services to Indians till her
last
 breath, as her belief in humanity and her unstoppable intention to help is highly praiseworthy. In conclusion, having considered the aforementioned reasons on both sides, few impoverished trustees prevent helping others in a different nation owing to their poverty-stricken financial status, while other organisations reach out to the needy without any boundaries and help beyond their calibre.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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