Some people believe that the biggest problem facing cities is the increasing number of cars. Others say there more serious problems. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Majority
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The majority
thinks that
extreme proliferation
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the extreme proliferation
of private vehicles is one of the major problems in the urban areas. Whilst, others assume that there are other more detrimental issues.
This
essay takes a look at both sides of the argument and reach a
resonable
showing reason or sound judgment
reasonable
conclusion.
Fristly
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Firstly
, individual means of transportation are drastically increasing
on
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in
town areas as they are fastest, easiest and relevant medium to commute.
Such
gadgets are causing adverse ramification by releasing carbon containing gases which cause
myraid
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a myriad
myriad
of health problems as well as environmental hazards.
Moreover
, because of
this
, people have to face lots of
effect
Suggestion
effects
in their day to day living. For
examaple
an item of information that is typical of a class or group
example
examples
: automobiles cause
emmision
the act of emitting; causing to flow forth
emission
emissions
omission
of harmful
gases which
Accept comma addition
gases, which
are the major reasons for
development
Suggestion
the development
of global warming, pollution, etc.
This
has resulted in diseases like asthma, tuberculosis and other skin problems. Admittedly,
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
factor like overpopulation is
major burden
Suggestion
a major burden
the major burden
in
such
large areas. Immigration of millions of people from countryside with different
puropses
an anticipated outcome that is intended or that guides your planned actions
purposes
props
purpose
such
as employment, health facilities, transportation services owing it.
In addition
to
this
,
increament
a process of becoming larger or longer or more numerous or more important
increment
in
number
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a number
the number
of criminal activities like robbery, murder and
pickpocket
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a pickpocket
are
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is
also
in prime concern.
This
creates difficulties in survival of people living in developed sites. In conclusion, from my opinion other factors contributing to negative impacts on livelihood in urban places
such
as crowd, ample of unemployment are the major issues as
compare
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compared
to increase
number
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the number
of private commuting
medium
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mediums
media
.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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