More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people say that increasing the price of fattening foods will solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

This
pie chart and table shows the major causes of agricultural
land
becoming less productive in the former and how these
causes affected
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causes, affected
the world during the 1990s in the latter. Overall, the major three causes of worldwide
land
degradation
were over-grazing, deforestation, and over-cultivation respectively.
In addition
to other causes which constitute a small percentage. While Europe
being
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is
the most region undergone
land
degradation
, North America was the least. The order of regions which had
land
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landed
degradation
by the percentage was Europe with 23%, Oceania with 13% and
lastly
North America with only 5%. The major cause of
land
degradation
in Europe was deforestation
with
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by
9.8
% whereas
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%, whereas
in Oceania it was over-grazing with 11.3% and in North America it was over-
cultivation
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cultivated
with 3.3%.
On the other hand
, the least common causes of
land
degradation
were over-
cultivation
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cultivated
in Oceania with 0% followed by deforestation in North America with 0.2% and
then
over-grazing in Europe by 5.5%.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • overweight
  • fattening foods
  • calorie-dense
  • healthier food choices
  • taxation
  • economic implications
  • social implications
  • subsidies
  • nutritional education
  • public health campaigns
  • nanny state
  • individual's right
  • consumer behavior
  • preventative measures
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