More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people say that increasing the price of fattening foods will solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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This

pie chart and table shows the major causes of agricultural

land

becoming less productive in the former and how these

causes affected

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causes, affected

the world during the 1990s in the latter. Overall, the major three causes of worldwide

land

degradation

were over-grazing, deforestation, and over-cultivation respectively.

In addition

to other causes which constitute a small percentage. While Europe

being

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the most region undergone

land

degradation

, North America was the least. The order of regions which had

land

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landed

degradation

by the percentage was Europe with 23%, Oceania with 13% and

lastly

North America with only 5%. The major cause of

land

degradation

in Europe was deforestation

with

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9.8

% whereas

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%, whereas

in Oceania it was over-grazing with 11.3% and in North America it was over-

cultivation

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cultivated

with 3.3%.

On the other hand

, the least common causes of

land

degradation

were over-

cultivation

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cultivated

in Oceania with 0% followed by deforestation in North America with 0.2% and

then

over-grazing in Europe by 5.5%.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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156 words

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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