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Air travel should be restricted because of pollution and uses up the world's fuel.Do you agree or disagree ?

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In todays globalised
world
 the
use
 of
air
travel
 is increasing day by day, by doing so it invites some negative effects
such
 as serious
pollution
 and uses of the
world
's
fuel
 resources. So, it is essential to restrict the
use
 of
air
travel
 at some extent.
Firstly
, the main problem associated with
air
travel
 is
pollution
. Nowadays all means of
air
travel
 produce many harmful gases which cause serious
pollution
 of the environment.
For instance
, plan or helicopter produces many harmful gases
such
 as carbon dioxide, carbon monoxide, nitrogen oxide etc. Which is very harmful for the environment. So, it is very essential to restrict the
use
 of
air
travel
 or to develop a new technology which can reduce the
pollution
.
Furthermore
, all means of
air
travel
such
 as helicopter and plane
use
 worlds fossil
fuel
 in high quantity, which may cause scarcity of
fuel
 in near future. The
fuel
 required for
air
travel
 is
also
 very costly because the
fuel
 used for
air
travel
 is in its pure form.
For example
, the
fuel
 used by
air
travel
 is more quantity compare to any other mode of transportation. So, we have to develop
such
 a new technology for
air
travel
 which uses renewable energy sources
such
 as sun or wind.
Also
, we have to restrict the
use
 of
air
travel
.
On the other hand
,
air
travel
 is one of the best mode of transportation, because it is very convenient and time saving. We can
travel
 long distance in a few hours. But, its harmful effects
such
 as
pollution
 and depletion of the
world
's
fuel
 are not negligible. So, we have to restrict the
use
 of
air
travel
. To pen down, I would like to say that
pollution
 and depletion of the
world
's
fuel
 are a big concern for today because it causes harmful effect in the future. So it is essential to restrict a
travel
 at some extent.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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