Some people believe that university education should only be offered to those who can pay for their own courses and the government should not be expected to fund higher education. To what extent do you agree?

Some people's consideration about higher
education
is that should not be free. People who
is
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are
eager to study
high
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higher
education
should pay their own courses
moreover
government should assist higher
education
. I considerably support
this
idea with some
exceptionals
a deliberate act of omission
exceptions
exemptions
. Today’s world, there is a very tough competition between countries, in order to be
foward
at or to or toward the front
forward
forwarded
in
this
competition it
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competition, it
is an obligation to give importance to higher
education
since higher
education
forms
fundemental
principles from which other truths can be derived
fundamentals
of technological improvements.
However it
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However, it
does not mean that states should encourage everybody to study at higher
education
. People who prefer to go to
university
should have some features
such
as industriousness, smartness, willing to
make
engage in
do
research, keen to spend most of their
time
at
library
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the library
a library
. It is impossible for every each
members
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member
of a
community
to have
such
features, that’s why higher
education
should not be unpaid
otherwise
most of people want to go the universities, quantity of graduated people is going to increase,
however
admittedly its quality is going to decline
dramaticly
in a very impressive manner
dramatically
.
Nevertheless there
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Nevertheless, there
should be some
exceptionals
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exceptions, for instance, if
exceptions, for instance if
exceptions for instance, if
for instance
, if a student is outstanding, genius and in same
time
not have
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doesn't have
a sufficient money to afford, in that
time
government
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the government
should support those kind of people. If we imagine the
community
like a machine, every part of that has various duties. That’s why every professional group should be employed in a
community
to work smoothly.
Furthermore there
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Furthermore, there
are some drawbacks to go to the
university
.
For instance
, entrepreneurship because if you have a
brillant
of surpassing excellence
brilliant
idea and courage to achieve it, in some those kind of
circumtances
your overall circumstances or condition in life (including everything that happens to you)
circumstances
to go to
university
might be a waste of
time
, because in that period of
time
people can gain life experience
instead
of spending it in
university
.
Besides
, higher
education
is costly, everybody in a
community
can not
can not
cannot
afford it and
also
social system
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a social system
can not
can not
cannot
provide it unpaid for all their people at the same
time
.
Consequently
, higher
education
is a very critical issue for every country,
however everybody
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however, everybody
in a
community
should not be
involve
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involved
in it, only
brillant
of surpassing excellence
brilliant
ones who are capable to take
high
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higher
education
should be supported.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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