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Online education is becoming more and more popular. Some people claim that e-learning has so many benefits that it will replace face-to-face education soon. Others say that traditional education is irreplaceable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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While it is often thought that e-learning is beneficial in
this
 modern era as well as going to replace face-to-face learning
method
 soon, others argue that
traditional educational system
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the traditional educational system
 is unchangeable.
in
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In
 my opinion
,
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe that e-learning will modify tradition of
education
on
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for
 upcoming years. On one hand
,
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,
people consider that e-Learning has so many benefits which are easier to attend the class, save the money of travelling and
this
benefits
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benefit
 are replaceable the learning
method
 of today's life as well as
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 agree on it.
In other words
, people prefer
the easiest
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the easy
 way in
this
 novel life and e-learning is the system people ought to use.
For example
, my college opened online courses recently because only 25% attendance
on
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in
at
 the classroom.
Furthermore
, over-aged people can learn the
education
 while they are in their home
interestingly
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interesting
interest-bearing
interested
.The society going to
beneficial
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benefit
 for
this
 system.
On the other hand
, many people mention that traditional
education
 is the
method
 which is unchangeable for society development. Many honourable
person
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people
persons
 succeed
by
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with
in
this
 type of learning
method
.It is quite impossible to change because all
type
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types
 of development of Nations adjusted with
this
 traditional
education
.Even people accept the
method
 only for inspiration of Golden humans of nations all over the world.If traditional
education
 replaced
,
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,
government
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the government
 cannot build the countries in
future
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the future
. In conclusion
,
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,
while people's opinion
vary
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varies
 in many ways
,
Accept space
,
I personally believe that e-learning is the
method
 which is beneficial for both in learning
method
 as well as upcoming days
also
.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-Learning
  • face-to-face education
  • remote learning
  • virtual classroom
  • webinar
  • digital platform
  • self-paced learning
  • interactive learning
  • course accessibility
  • academic networking
  • pedagogy
  • synchronous/asynchronous sessions
  • MOOCs (Massive Open Online Courses)
  • edtech (educational technology)
  • holistic development
  • practical skills
  • collaborative learning
  • digital divide
  • curriculum adaptation
  • technological literacy
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