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You have recently taken a two day course .write to give your feedback to the course organiser and say Guve details of the course What did like or dislike about it Suggest more improvement to the course

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Dear sir, My name is
hafeeza
dependent upon or characterized by chance
haphazard
 and I am a 12th standard student of St.Mary's Girls High School.I am writing with regards to the two
day
course
 about 'basics of animation' which your team had organised in the town hall on December 20. My ambition is to be an animation
developerand
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developer and
hence
 when I heard about your
course
,
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,
I was enthralled to join.The
course
 contained both practical and theory lessons
.
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.
First
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The first day
day
,
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,
the teacher explained the history of animation and how it evolved from drawing
in
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on
 paper to those in computers.Apart from
that it
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that, it
also
 included how to operate the
basics
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basic
 software and train ourselves to be a
god
benefit
good
 animator. The classes were conducted
on
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in
 the town hall for the
first
day
 and moved to the computer room of the public library for the practical lessons on the
second
day
 The
course
 was well organised as a whole. Each student was supplied with notepads and pen. The lecturer sounded very professional, educated and experienced.
However
, the practical classes were not organised well. There were not enough computers and one was shared by 2 to 3 students.
As a result
, we could not imply the theory learnt into practice. I would like to join the follow-up classes of
this
course
, you are going to conduct on January 5. Before that, I expect you to make arrangements for practical classes somewhere
were
In or at or to what place
where
 there are enough computers or where students can take a turn in using one
.
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.
 Looking forward to hearing a favourable reply from you, Yours faithfully, Hafeeza
Submitted by hafirkz on

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