Smacking children is the best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (HERE WE HAVE A SINGLE STATEMENT AND WE NEED TO GIVE OUR OPINION)

Beating children has become increasingly popular among certain demographics of society.These people believe that beating children is the most correct way to discipline.
This
essay will argue why I completely disagree with the above statement. Primarily
,I
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understand why some individuals like parents and teachers think that beating children can be effective because they feel that beating will make them f
ear
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fearful
of losing their pride and respect among peers
also
the instant control over the
child
does make them think that they have disciplined the
child
further
they argue that
for example
even the worst behaved prisoners are controlled by power in prisons and
this
kind of punishment should work for misbehaving children too. Despite,
t
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,
he above mentioned argument physical punishment will produce a
child
can have long term adverse effects on a
child
's personality and mental health.Punishing a
child
will
also
have a tremendous effect on his/her education and confidence.
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For
i
nstance let’s
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instance, let’s
argue a
child
makes a mistake by shouting in the school at a fellow classmate and the tutor caught him red handed during the incident and if the class tutor starts beating
instead
of advising what’s right and w
rong
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wrong, then
then
the
child
will follow the same method when he grows up because
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the child
children
will lose the sense of empathy to fellow citizens because he was taught differently
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In
this
i
nstance it
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instance, it
is the responsibility of the tutor to show mercy and forgive or pardon the
child
with a warning and advice if not
this
can bring about
further
complications regarding his/her behaviour after they become adults in the future. To conclude, I completely disagree that physical punishment for children will not bring about any discipline in the long term though it can only make the
child
quiet for v
ery short time
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a very short time
which is unfavourable on all grounds to c
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the child's
child's
mental and personality and confidence.

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