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In modern society, some people argue that schools become unnecessary as children can study at home via the Internet. Do you agree or disagree?

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In modern society, some people argue that schools become unnecessary as children can study at home via the Internet. Do you agree or disagree? Nowadays, some people advocate that students don't need to go to the real classroom,
instead
 they can attend it online, directly from their homes. In my opinion, I utterly believe that physical presence
at
Suggestion
in
 educational institutions is the only way to make the best of students.
Firstly
, I would take myself as an example, because during my university I passed some of the online courses.
Thus
, I can say that the quality of a knowledge gained is not the same and I had many questions while I had watched videos, but I couldn’t make any questions. It's only a one way type of communication.
Furthermore
, our focus is much better when we are in the same room as a professor, and we can better experience the topic
that is
 being presented.
Secondly
, the school plays a very important role in our lives and the most significant thing provided is
process
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a process
 of socialization. We spend a
third
 of our childhood time in and around the classroom learning not only from professors but
also
 from our friends and we shape our personalities.
That is
 the place where we meet our
first
 friends, we make a wide number of contacts and some people can even find their future partner there;
therefore
, the school cannot be replaced to any virtual platform. To sum up, I think the moment we start to transform our society into virtual one will be the end of civilization as we know today.
Hence
, the human beings will not use their full social and intellectual potential and that we will stagnate. I'm afraid even to imagine what would happen if we take out schools and move classrooms to online platforms.
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