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Scientists have been warning for many years about protecting the environment and that people must limit the use of energy in their daily lives. Despite warnings, many people do not do so. What are the reasons for this and how can people be encouraged to protect the environment?

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It has been known for a long time that human beings need to limit the everyday
energy
use
 and that environment needs to be protected.
However
, it is
also
 a fact that very few people actually take steps to improve the situation. There are several reasons behind
this
, but if proper measures are taken
this
 situation can be rectified. There are many factors responsible for the indifference towards the environment among people.
To begin
 with, people are accustomed to the luxuries of life and it is very hard to switch back to a simpler life.
For example
, it is very difficult to live without air conditioners today. Actually, global warming is making conditions warmer, accentuating the need of air conditioners.
Similarly
, we are accustomed to machines like washing machines, blenders and choppers in the kitchen and it is certainly very difficult if not impossible to go back to washing clothes by hands or chopping vegetables using knives. Another reason is that people believe that their individual action would not make a big difference. Some people are
also
 of the opinion that environmentalists are exaggerating the consequences of climate change and global warning. They trust science to find them the solutions to these issues. Despite all these reasons, I still believe that many people can be encouraged to take steps.
Firstly
, the government can implement strict rules and regulations, which would ensure
energy
 efficiency in homes or
use
 of renewable
energy
 in homes.
For example
, many local governments pass large new residential building plans only if the plan incorporates solar rooftop panels. The
second
 measure that governments from around the world can do is penalizing wastage or excessive
use
 of
energy
 by very high rates. Nothing would prompt a bigger reaction than a hit at people’s pockets. In conclusion, there are many reasons for people not taking steps to safeguard the environment and to cut down their
energy
use
.
However
, I still believe that a lot of people can still be motivated to mend their ways.
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