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Most societies has its homeless people. Some people think that the best way to help them is to give them money. What extent do you agree?

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The population has increased rapidly. Now China is the largest nation in population
comparing
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compared
comparison
comparisons
 to other nations. Due to rapid growth, most of individuals not getting basic necessity for holding their
life-style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
lifestyles
.
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, due to a lack of
money
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, they can't afford a house for them. Some people argue that giving
money
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 to homeless people will solve the problem and that aids them to grow in the future. In my opinion, for homeless individuals, their priority is
money
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. So people can help them by giving
money
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. In
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 world, everywhere we find a homeless person, who sleeps
in
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on
 the streets. They usually don't get food and home for living. Their life is bit complex ad compare to others.
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, in India, most of the
beggers
a pauper who lives by begging
beggars
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burgers
 reside
in
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on
 the street due to lack of
money
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. And the population of homeless people is growing day-by-day. For
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 type of people society has been embarked a different kind of service to aid homeless people.
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, some television stars
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 provide
money
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 to them for a better lifestyle. In
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 scenario, NGO's are doing good jobs.
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, a
youtube
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YouTube
 star name called "Varun", he goes to every homeless and destitute people and buys all kinds of stuff and gives
money
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 for a better future. They adopt homeless people by giving home, food and decent work where they can showcase their talent. To extend my view, giving
money
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 will solve most of the issue,
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, help them in every situation will help them.
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 is one of the best approach for them, who does not like to get famous among them. So some individuals give
money
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 to them through NGO's. To conclude my opinion,
money
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 is
best approach
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the best approach
 for a homeless person, Through
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 they can buy their essential products in life.
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