Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improvising road safety. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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that enforcing
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of improving road safety.Each view has its own merits. From the majority point of view, road safety should be prioritised rather than taking action after the fact.Posting speed limits,school zones, crossings and danger signs in
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areas ,construction of better roads and proper
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the crucial part is played by the person in the driver seat and their awareness. Organising events, posting banners,
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the aftermath of an accident the burden both emotional and economical on the people involved and their families will get people to think and will have a positive outcome and
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a sense of individual responsibility. Most accidents are caused
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nature of the drivers. there is
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huge rise in alcohol and substance
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accidents. The idea behind
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in punishment severity and rigidness of the rules is to
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a sense of fear and responsibility
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to prevent any tragedies. Imposing
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larger fines and extended
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are highly effective in keeping irresponsible drivers in check.
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both views are equally relevant and when used in conjunction will yield far better results and countless lives can be saved but
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on only one aspect would be counterproductive.We may not be able to prevent every accident but we must
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to make it so.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deterrent
  • repeat offenses
  • infrastructure improvements
  • public awareness campaigns
  • reckless driving
  • traffic management technologies
  • intelligent traffic lights
  • speed cameras
  • public transportation
  • minimize
  • enhance safety
  • allocate funds
  • road signs
  • road safety
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