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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both Views and give your opinion.

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Whether or not to share as much
information
 as possible in
research
, academics and
business
is increasingly becoming
Suggestion
are increasingly becoming
 controversial. While some people are of the opinion that much
information
 are to be shared in
research
,
business
 and academics, a handful of people are against sharing detailed
information
. The essay will discuss both sides of the argument in depth. There are growing numbers of scientific researchers, academia and
business
 analyst that believe sharing detailed
information
 is important. They have
reasons
Suggestion
reason
 to believe that sharing detailed
information
 will help the society in having adequate knowledge of the subject matter. Because adequate and detailed
information
 helps the public and other researcher make better decision, it is important
such
information
 should not be
horded
a secret store of valuables or money
hoarded
herded
 and expensive to access. A detailed report was published as regards the current outbreak of
ebola
Suggestion
Ebola
, even though the virus had affected some areas. The report helped the scientific community in carrying out the appropriate
research
 and help the government focus on some areas that should be quarantined. These people have a good reason to believe that detailed
information
 should be shared without any constraint.
However
, to the people who think that
such
information
 is too valuable to be made available to
public
Suggestion
the public
 are those who believe that some
information
 should be discreet. There
are
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is
 some
information
 that
are
Suggestion
is
 too valuable to be released freely because they believe that so
many
Suggestion
much
 effort and money have been spent to bring those data together and it should be released to the public at a token even if the cost is not much but just to appreciate the effort of the researchers.
This
 reason form the basis of their justification that valuable
information
 should not be released cheaply. So many people believe that sharing
information
 relating to
business
, academic and scientific
research
 should be made available without
hording
the activity of keeping something secret
hiding
 anything from the public.
In
contrast some
Accept comma addition
contrast, some
 set
believe
Suggestion
believes
 that those
information
are
Suggestion
is
 too valuable to be shared cheaply.
This
 essay discussed various reasons why different people have their views. I strongly believe that
information
 should be shared freely.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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