Some people believe that watching big events like sports and the Olympics on TV encourage adults to exercise regularly. While others disagree that there are other effective ways of getting them to exercise.Discuss both views and give your opinion

Recently, the discuss on the
way
to promote
exercise
has become heated. Some people believe that watching the big event might be the best
way
while the others don't. I think both of the view are all reasonable while I am more all for the
second
viewpoint.
Firstly
, in terms of the big events, the engagement is undeniable while the persistence might be a bit hard to applaud.
For instance
, events like the Olympic, can engage people in sports, help people to have the interest in sports implicitly, which can encourage people to do
exercise
spontaneously.
However
, as most of the sports like running and swimming are strenuous, it might be tough for the adults, especially those who hardly
work
before, to form a habit to do it regularly.
Therefore
, they might be hard to persist even they are attracted by the big events.
Secondly
, there are more attractive
way
to get people to
exercise
nowadays.
For example
, the FIFA football games and the Tokyo Olympic games from the game company Nitendo, these games help combine doing sports with playing video games. As most adults might need to
work
for a long time, they might prefer some leisure events after
work
.
As a result
, doing sports on purpose might be too big for them, doing sports while playing games might be more attractive when it comes to relax.
As a result
, the might intend to
work
out everyday subconsciously, which can help them to
exercise
regularly in a more effective
way
. In conclusion, watching big events might only attractive people to sports, cannot make sure people to
exercise
regularly, while some video games might help people to get more interest in workout and play it more often, I assert that watching big events might not be the best
way
to encourage people to keep fit regularly, in order to promote sports, we might try to think of other ways which can be more relaxing for adults.
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