Nowadays families are not as close as they used to be. What do you think are the causes of this? What can be done to make families closer?

In
this
modern era, a human being had many changes in terms of lifestyle,
patiency
the power or right to give orders or make decisions
potency
patience
levels and food habits. I believe, the most affected part is having
in-active
(chemistry) not participating in a chemical reaction; chemically inert
inactive
relations or totally losing contacts with their own family members. Busier lifestyle had made people less communicated with their families leads to differences and
miscommunication
. In the
first
part of the essay, I will explain the reasons behind it. In the
second
part, I will give possible solutions to make a relation stronger within families. The
first
and foremost level of family breakage happens when family members come out to settle outside their hometown. The other reason can be because people started to thrive for money more than they used two or three decades ago, relations are
least important
Suggestion
less important
for them.
For example
, five years back one of my friends moved to England without his family due to employment reasons and visited them only two or three times over the span. To maintain a healthy relation with family,
a
Suggestion
A
person should choose his or her's job within the same town or city their family stay. Should set a gathering at least twice or thrice a year to hold a strong bondage
among
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between
them and
also
should make use of social networking apps like Skype and Facebook's video calling feature to communicate.
For example
, my parents talk to me daily using Whatsapp which helps us to improve our relationship. In conclusion, even though the families lost their charm by getting separated due to several reasons. They should gather regularly or at least they can use technology and should have a mindset that families are
priority
Suggestion
a priority
than earning money.

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