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Some people think paying taxes is a big enough contribution to their society, while others think people have more responsibilities as members of society than only paying taxes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There is no doubt that paying taxes help toward building a nation.
However
, some people believe that paying their taxes only is not good enough and we have more duties
toward
Suggestion
to
 our
society
. I agree with those who argue that we have more responsibilities as citizens. On the one hand, in today’s contemporary
society
 a big chunk of someone’s earning goes toward taxes, leaving them behind with a small amount of
money
. Because of
this
 citizens often have to tighten their pockets and they are most of the time busy with the procurement of day to day needs. Taking the former into account, it leaves the onus of building infrastructures, roads, and creating resources of societies with the government as they are the ones, who receive
such
 a big amount of
money
 collected through taxes.
On the other hand
, I believe
in addition
 to paying taxes, we have more duties as responsible citizens. People should abide by laws and help those in need.
For example
, if no one is obeying the law, it will create havoc and disruption of
society
 and the government will need to spend more amount of
money
 on maintaining the public order, spending
furthermore
.
Although
, the government makes programs for all members of a community, sometimes these welfare schemes are not able to reach less fortunate members of
society
 leaving them vulnerable. We can help
such
 members by being altruistic to our fellow countrymen. In conclusion,
although
 the
money
 contributed through taxes is helpful for a country for a variety of reasons, But I believe citizens of any
society
 have more duties
such
 as abiding by the laws and help those in need, making their nation a place full of felicity
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