Some say children should be disciplined at an early age. Others , however, feel this is not a good idea. Discuss both these view and give your opinion.

It goes without saying that
discipline
is the most vital key for every ones
life
to make a
life
more organize and beautiful.
However some
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However, some
argue that
discipline
should learn from
childhood
whereas, some people have different opinion about
this
. I strongly agree that we have to learn
rules
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the rules
and regulations from the early stage of our
life
. Those
believe
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believing
that
childhood it
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childhood, it
childhood it's
childhood it's it's
not the perfect
time
of learning
discipline
they are
lack
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lacking
behind from the modern world. In my following paragraphs I am trying to explain some reasons with relevant lifetime examples beside that, before giving a reasoned conclusion I will
also
try to discuss the others views. At the very
out set
the time at which something is supposed to begin
outset
of my paragraph I would like to mention that,
childhood
is the
time
when one
kid
can learn what is right and what is wrong. Since they have no knowledge about the
life
, positive rules will make them more practical. Researches
fond
come upon unexpectedly or after searching
found
that, from the age of 7 one
kid
can able to understand and right directions from parent will help them to get right decision. Another most crucial point is that, manners does not get from an institute, it comes from parents
in
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at
the
time
of grown up.
Moreover
, if parents
does not teach
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do not teach
his or her
kid
who to behave with the seniors or whom to respect, in the teenage
period
the
kid
become immature. To cite an example, every mother
teach
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teaches
her
kid
to say hello to seniors and keep silence when you are in
prayers hall
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the prayer hall
prayer hall
and so on. All those activities create
a
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an
image in the mind of
kid
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a kid
the kid
and he or she will do the same in the future.
This
is who a
kid
know about
discipline
.
Last
but not least, early age is the perfect
time
to realize the value of
time
.
In addition
,
childhood it
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childhood, it's
childhood it's
the best
period
to learn about the advantages of timing and disadvantages of mistiming.
On the other hand
, some people have
different opinion regarding
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a different opinion regarding period
different opinion regarding periods
period
of learning
discipline
. They believe the
childhood
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child
may not be the best
time
for
it whereas they
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it, whereas they
have enough
time
to learn it. From
there
of them or themselves
their
point of view,
childhood
is a very sensitive
time
of every
kids they
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kids, they
kid they
kid kid they
may not be able to take the burden of
this rules
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these rules
this rule
and regulations. In
this
circumstances
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circumstance
, kids may become emotionally imbalanced, feels pressure and
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
the interest of learning the new things. To sum up, it can be said that,
childhood
is the perfect
period
to learn about the
discipline
and know how to obey the rules rather the younger age.
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