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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern lifestyle. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, modern
lifestyle
 is forcing all the formats to
developed
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develop
. While, the development of
convenience
 foods has serviced
public
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the public
 for
levelled
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levelling
 up with
novle
an extended fictional work in prose; usually in the form of a story
novel
noble
naval
lifstyle
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
, people now attracted to the modern foods. In my opinion, I think that, there are obesity
nd
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
 health diseases
likewise
 extreme problems when
a
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A
 few of benefits as well.
Nevertheless
, there are vital issues in keeping up with the increasing modern
lifestyle
 by taking the
convenience
 foods and
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 agree.
Firstly
, obesity is the significant issue.
In other words
, people became fat by taking the
convenience
 foods.
For example
,
Accept space
,
convenience
 or junk foods help the
helth
the bottom of a shoe or boot; the back part of a shoe or boot that touches the ground and provides elevation
heels
heart
heat
 to grow the
wieght
the vertical force exerted by a mass as a result of gravity
weight
 as well as people distract to go to
workout
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work out
 for
lose
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losing
 some weights.
Secondly
, health diseases are one of the biggest dangerous creation of modern foods because a lot of health problems
for example
, Kidney failure
,
Accept space
,
liver damage
etc
 problems progressed by these modern foods.To summarize
,
Accept space
,
the life of people became on danger
for
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of
in
from
 taking
convenience
 foods. Admittedly, there are a few benefits of taking
convenience
 foods to keep up with modern
lifestyle
. One benefit is that guest treated by modern foods.
In other words
, people learn the modern dishes for consuming their relatives or guest.
As a result
, relatives felt happier by the treat of modern items. Another
positve
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
 is that influenced other.
For example
, a new food item can be
share
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shared
 with others,
as a result
, others could learn that and cooked it for eating.To conclude, some benefits
for
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of
 taking
convenience
 foods helped people to connect with others
on
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in
 society. In conclusion, development of
convenience
 foods has feeding and influenced others
likewise
 few benefits while
has
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having
 a huge number of problems as well.
in
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In
 my opinion
,
Accept space
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 personally consider that there are more disadvantages rather than benefits, because, the cause of taking
convenience
 foods has far problems rather than helped people keep up with the speed of the modern
lifestyle
.
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