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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern lifestyle. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, modern
lifestyle
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 is forcing all the formats to
developed
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develop
. While, the development of
convenience
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 foods has serviced
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the public
 for
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levelling
 up with
novle
an extended fictional work in prose; usually in the form of a story
novel
noble
naval
lifstyle
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
, people now attracted to the modern foods. In my opinion, I think that, there are obesity
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in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
 health diseases
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 extreme problems when
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 few of benefits as well.
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, there are vital issues in keeping up with the increasing modern
lifestyle
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 by taking the
convenience
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 foods and
i
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I
 agree.
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, obesity is the significant issue.
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, people became fat by taking the
convenience
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 foods.
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,
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,
convenience
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 or junk foods help the
helth
the bottom of a shoe or boot; the back part of a shoe or boot that touches the ground and provides elevation
heels
heart
heat
 to grow the
wieght
the vertical force exerted by a mass as a result of gravity
weight
 as well as people distract to go to
workout
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work out
 for
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losing
 some weights.
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, health diseases are one of the biggest dangerous creation of modern foods because a lot of health problems
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, Kidney failure
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,
liver damage
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 problems progressed by these modern foods.To summarize
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the life of people became on danger
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of
in
from
 taking
convenience
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 foods. Admittedly, there are a few benefits of taking
convenience
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 foods to keep up with modern
lifestyle
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. One benefit is that guest treated by modern foods.
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, people learn the modern dishes for consuming their relatives or guest.
As a result
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, relatives felt happier by the treat of modern items. Another
positve
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
 is that influenced other.
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, a new food item can be
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shared
 with others,
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, others could learn that and cooked it for eating.To conclude, some benefits
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of
 taking
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 foods helped people to connect with others
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in
 society. In conclusion, development of
convenience
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 foods has feeding and influenced others
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 few benefits while
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having
 a huge number of problems as well.
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 my opinion
,
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,
i
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I
 personally consider that there are more disadvantages rather than benefits, because, the cause of taking
convenience
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 foods has far problems rather than helped people keep up with the speed of the modern
lifestyle
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.
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