Governments around the world spend too much money on treating illnesses and diseases and not enough on health education and prevention. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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I strongly agree that at present governments provide more funds on treating diseases and
illnesses and
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illnesses, and
allocate minimal funds on health education and prevention. I think it is more effective to increase the budget in designing programs that aims to teach the importance of healthy lifestyle to prevent major diseases.
Government
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should use the funds to make various platforms in educating the public
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about
the causes of various diseases and how it could be prevented. I believe if the
government
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will have community based activities related to healthy lifestyle it will help decrease the percentage of people with medical ailment. Programs
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as sex education subject should be part of the curriculum in secondary schools. At present, there
are
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is
an increase of person diagnosed with the disease and it continues to rise due to ignorance of the public. Prevention is the best cure. It is cost efficient to formulate preventive programs than to invest and purchase medicines and equipments.
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,
government
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should focus more on people and how to
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develop their knowledge and awareness. I believe that if people powered with knowledge of what causes a disease will surely increase percentage of people living a healthy life. I think
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approach is good for
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the long term
. In summary,
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government
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the government
allocate
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allocates
more funds on medicines and medical equipments more rather than to portion a higher budget in promoting health education and prevention. I strongly agree that
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it is
it's
about time for the
government
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to use a much
effective
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more effective
way to solve the issues
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in
of
healthcare
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health care
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