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Some people think everyone should be a vegetarian, because we do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued by certain individuals that all of us should be vegetarian as eating meat is not necessary for a healthy diet. I tend to disagree with
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 restriction would result in infringing human rights and would deprive people of much-needed nutrients.In my opinion, it is the basic human right of every free person to decide what should be one’s menu for fulfilling one’s needs for nutrition.
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, it seems to be against the fundamental rights and justice to ask everyone to become vegetarian. People nowadays are well aware of their personal rights and restrictions of
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nature, not
 only distort the overall peace and harmony of
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 could become a cause of injustice and anarchy which by no means beneficial for the entire country. There are certain countries of the world where slaughtering animals for food consumptions is prohibited and
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 regulations have according to many studies resulted in discontentment in millions of citizens. Apart from the aforementioned facts, it is scientifically proven that consumption of meat is a prime source of proteins, fats and other essential nutrients that are considered vital for a healthy individual. Depriving a human being of these fundamental components of a balanced diet could lead to fatal diseases like malnutrition and osteoporosis. Meat in any
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form, whether
 it be beef, chicken or fish is important for human consumption to stay healthy and fit. For the same reason, the United Nations Organization has considered a daily intake of at least a recommended quantity of meat for every person. Summing up, it can be argued that the imposition of restriction on food items is a violation of human rights and can cause detrimental effects on the health of people.
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, in light of the stated arguments I completely disagree that everyone should be a vegetarian.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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