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In some countries young people are encouraged to travel or work for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this .

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In recent
years taking
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years, taking
 a gap
year
 among young generations is becoming extremely popular.
However
, There are both pros and cons of
this
 situation which I will discuss now. Let's begin by looking at some benefits of
such
 decision. One of the main positives is that youngsters can earn a living for their future studies.
As a result
, they will be capable of paying for university charges and accommodation.
In addition
,
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 or working for a
year
 can help students who are hardly self-assured to decide what they want to do. It means that they will have a chance to choose what university course is suitable for them. By doing
this
, with precious occupation, their life will be much more enjoyable. Turning to the other side of the argument,
firstly
, it is possible to lose the ability to study during a
year
 without the sense of education and they become unmotivated about starting course again. The majority of cases say that by doing so, even after starting studying, many students are likely to quit their groups and to live how they are used to.
Secondly
, the education programmes that youngsters are intended to enter could be closed down.
This
 is mainly because,
the
Suggestion
The
 job market in
modern world
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the modern world
a modern world
 is increasingly changeable. It leads many young people will be confused to find
appropriate course
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an appropriate course
 again. To sum up, young people should consider both positives and drawbacks of taking a gap
year
.
Otherwise
, it can cause problems which
none
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no-one
 wants to face with.
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