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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree

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Online shopping has certainly led to a shift in the consumer buying behaviour. But the day online shopping will completely hijack the traditional shopping experience is far off.
This
 essay will disagree that the increase in online shopping will to lead to the shutting of all shops in towns and cities and discuss two reasons for it. Inadvertently, a lot of people nowadays prefer purchasing through the various shopping apps that are available.
However
, there are still some who prefer to buy things the traditional way,
that is
, through the neighbourhood stores. Buying through online websites does not entail the personal experience that the physical stores offer. Many of these shop owners have painstakingly cultivated a relationship with their customers,
this
 warmth is essentially missing from the online shopping
excerise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
.
For example
, the mom and pop shop owners are familiar with the neighbourhood.
Secondly
, a section of consumers
want
Suggestion
wants
 to have a tactile observation of the products before making a buying
decison
the act of making up your mind about something
decision
. When purchasing in a small shop the person makes an informed decision after thoroughly examining the item.
This
 gives an assurance to the buyer that he is paying for what he has bought and he will not get cheated which usually happens in the case
of
Suggestion
Of
 online shopping.
For example
, online shopping is famous for duping by selling fake products or their products do not match the description in many cases. To conclude, even though online shopping has grown and will continue to grow, there
is
Suggestion
are
 enough scope and demand for the shops in the small towns and cities to continue and proper.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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