In order to improve a country’s education system, high school students should be encouraged to publicly critique their teachers online. Do you agree with this? What are some other ways high school education could be improved?

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Arguments over how to improve a country’s

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system have been going on for a very long time. Often different strategies work f

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different countries.

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, allowing high

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students to openly critique their instructors online is a s

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that I feel does not improve the quality of high

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instruction in any country. Alternative

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scheduling and teacher monitoring through video are much better approaches and will be analysed for viability in

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systems that take short, periodic w

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of one larger two-month break at summertime. Overall, students have just as much holiday time as their peers in traditional holiday arrangements, but there is not

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summer, and

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allows students to mentally retain more of their studies.

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arrangement is clearly a more plausible alternative to arguments supporting the open criticism of teachers on the internet.

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, schools should consider videotaping classes to both monitor teacher performance and student conduct. I once taught at a

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a vetting process that would likely produce more insightful criticism.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

288 words

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In order to improve a country’s education system, high school students should be encouraged to publicly critique their teachers online. Do you agree with this? What are some other ways high school education could be improved?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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Many people are afraid to leave their home because of their fear of crime. Some people believe that more action should be taken to prevent crime, but others feel that little can be dome. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays more and more people have to compete with young people for the same jobs. What problems does the cause? What are some possible solution.

Many people believe that it is easier to have a healthy lifestyles in the countryside. other believe that there are health benefits of living in cities. discuss both view and give your opinion.