The number of older people is increasing. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

Nowadays
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with the advancement of modern
technology life
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technology, life
expectancy of senior citizens
are improved
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is improved
.
Eventhough
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Even though
family members find difficult to provide primary
care
due to lack of attention
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Main benefit
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the main benefit
the Main benefit
of
this
is that older people can be asked to provide their knowledge and experience for the family and the country though they are retired
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These
days
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day
population of elderly people
are increased
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is increased
and due to lack of elderly
care
facilities both
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facilities, both
family members and elderly persons facing a huge burden. In
this
modern era people having a very hectic
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
and spend a lot of their time outside their parents or
grand parents
a parent of your father or mother
grandparents
unable to providing proper
care
and sufficient love that they need to maintain healthy and safe life
.
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people
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People
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for
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For
example in
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example, in
most countries young people leave their parents for different reasons
such
as education, jobs
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,
or marriage and unable to look after their parents
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when
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When
people are getting old they need special
care
and love as their mental and physical well being drastically falling down during
this
period and unable to provide satisfied
care
and love
leads problems
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leads to problems
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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