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In some area of the US, a ‘curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion on this?

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Providing safety of the nation is one of the most important parts for any
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. Maintain law and order situation is always challenging for those who runs the country. In US administration, impose curfew on youngsters to travel without adults at night to make sure that their youth is safe. In
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 essay, we are going to discuss about the curfew being imposed in the US. Sometimes governments have to take some measure to make sure that the citizens of their country remain safe.
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, the
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 provides free health insurance so that the nation as a whole keeps safe and healthy.
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government
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the government
 makes harsh rules to penalize the criminals for the crimes they commit to develop the fear of law in general public. As far as US
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 concern, they consider their nation’s safety at world level due to which US has to invade in other countries to make sure that no potential threat will harm the citizens of US.
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, US have to take
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 measure in their own country as well.
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, recently US armed forces started the operation against drug dealers, which conduct their activities around the city after sunset. For the success of
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 operation against drug dealers US start imposing the curfew on teenager so, that SWAT forces can easily maintain active surveillance in the cities with arm weapons without creating chaos between the kids and teenagers.
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