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In some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but in other cases, people choose their own marriage partners. Discuss both systems and state which you think is better.

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In some part of the world it is
believe th
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is believed
at spouse are selected by their parents.
However
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, in other instances, individual choose their sou
lmates. I
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soul mates
n my opi
nion I co
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opinion, I
nsider that it is better people select their life partner. On the
one
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 hand, persons who opine that ind
ividual ou
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individuals
an individual
the individual
ght to be the
one
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 to organise their partner do so because adults have the right to make their own decision and I agree with
this
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 view. Simply put, they are gro
wn-ups an
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grown-up
d are in bet
ter position to
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a better position
 know what they want and make app
ropriate and favourable decision fo
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appropriate and favourable decisions
an appropriate and favourable decision
the appropriate and favourable decision
r themselves.
Thi
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s likely, w
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This, likely
ill make and sustain a successful
marriage
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 for a longer period of time. Exa
mple ca
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An example
The example
n be seen in a research conducted by Adewale T e
t al
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T, et
, on principle of marrying well in the Western Nigeria. The study showed that 85 percent of relationship which was arranged by the couple themselves stand the test of time than the
one
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 selected by their parents 35 percent.
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, the need for persons to select their sou
lmates.
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soul mates
On the other hand
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, societies which believe that parents should be the
one
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 to organise
marriage
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 for their children do so because of cul
ture an
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cultural
d social norms.
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, they tend to follow str
ictly the tradition of
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strictly to the tradition
 their land with the hope that
such
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 arrangements will be beneficial to the couple and most importantly preserve the relationship.
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, many
mar
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riage in
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marriages
 the tra
ditionalistic pa
one who adheres to traditional views
traditionalist
rt of South Sudan were organised by their parents. In conclusion,
although
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 some parents choose lif
e partner fo
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a life partner
r their children
as a result
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 of culture and tradition of their society, it is sensible to conclude that it is better individual select their mates for
marriage
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 because they will make a rightful and positive decision for themselves. 290 words.
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