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Some people think that it is beneficial to young children if sent to Nursery School before starting Primary School. Other people think that Young Children should spend time with Family than going to Nursery School. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #children #nursery #school #time
Education is the
bed rock
solid unweathered rock lying beneath surface deposits of soil
bedrock
 and the basic need parents ought to give their children. Outside the fact that
achooling
the act of teaching at school
schooling
 contribute to the
up bringing
properties acquired during a person's formative years
upbringing
 of children
,
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,
it is
also
 important that they spend time with their parents before commencing primary education. Studies have prove that most children who start
nursary
a child's room for a baby
nursery
 school early happen to be more intelligent because they are more exposed to academic activities than those who do not. The self-esteem of any children
depend
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depends
 on the level of parental up bring which is
been
the state or fact of existing
being
 developed in school by teachers. Children become more friendly and have
great sense
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a great sense
 of
humor
a message whose ingenuity or verbal skill or incongruity has the power to evoke laughter
humour
 when they are exposed to human relations Technic at their early age. Personally
,
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,
I would support the motion of a child or children should start their
education pursue
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education, pursue
 from
nursary
Suggestion
the nursery
nursery
 before proceeding to primary because spending time with parents may not be as effective as schooling at that early stage of their lives.
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