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As public safety is of the highest importance, it is often necessary to test new products on animals. It is better for a few animals to suffer from for human life to be placed at risk by untested products. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The testing of new
products
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 on
animals
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 is controversial. Some
people
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 claim that
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 view of public safety, it is essential to test these new
products
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 on
animals
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. These
people
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also
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 feel that
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 of putting human
life
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 at risk, it is better for a few
animals
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suffer
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to suffer
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by
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 untested
products
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. I completely agree with
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 statement.
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, few
animals
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has
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have
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 the same genetic configuration as that of
humans
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.
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Hence
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 their manifestations are similar to
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those
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humans
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of humans
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.
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,
injection
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 insulin is a
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life saving
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life-saving
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 drug for diabetics. It was released to the public
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 only after testing on
animals
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 for immediate and delayed manifestations. Perhaps
,
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apply
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 millions of
people
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 would have succumbed to diabetes
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 if
this
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life saving
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life-saving
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 drug
was
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had
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 not
tested
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been tested
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 on
animals
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.
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, to attain utmost safety for millions of
people
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any
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, any
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 new drug or product must ensure adequate testing on
animals
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, which are genetically similar to
human
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the human
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 genome.
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,
humans
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 are allergic to certain chemicals
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, and
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 they are prone to anaphylactic shock, which can cause death instantly.
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, certain untested perfumes or deodorants can result in severe
life
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threatening
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life-threatening
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 allergic reactions.
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, if some
animals
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 are sacrificed
while
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 testing, it has indirectly saved
lives
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the lives
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 of thousands of
people
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. Because
,
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apply
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such
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products
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 will not be released into the market.
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,
humans
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 can be at risk
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 if they are using
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,
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 which are not tested adequately. In conclusion, many human lives can be protected
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 if the new
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 undergo prior adequate animal testing.
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, harming
few
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a few
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animals
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 is better than risking
the
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apply
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human
life
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.

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task
Say your view at once and stay with it through the essay.
task
Give 2-3 clear reasons and simple facts or cases to back them.
language
Use easy words and short lines; avoid hard words.
coherence
Use link words for flow, like first, also, but, so, and then.
structure
End with a short, clear final sentence that repeats your view.
content
Clear position is shown early.
structure
The essay has a simple and clear layout: intro, two body parts, conclusion.
content
It uses basic examples to back points.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • public safety
  • untested products
  • animal welfare
  • moral implications
  • scientific validity
  • alternative methods
  • regulations
  • ethical considerations
  • technological developments
  • public sentiment
  • activism
  • societal values
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