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Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments. Others believe those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Some people argued that the basic amenities of
life
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life, such
such
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 as housing should be piloted by the
government
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 while others opined that the entrepreneurs who single handedly foot the bills of their building construction should be given liberty to
design
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 it to their taste.
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 essay would discuss on both sides of
argument
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the argument
an argument
arguments
 and why privilege should be given to individuals to freestyle their building with the
design
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 of their choice.
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 with, landed properties like well constructed buildings as seen in metropolitans should be foreseen and taken care of by
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government
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the government
 to ensure optimum stability and management.
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 the
design
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 of the building will be in uniform portraying the image of which it's meant for.
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example new
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example, new
 buildings constructed in Nigerian Navy
barracks it's
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barracks, it's
 always painted white and
blue which
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blue, which
 depicts the image of
government
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 property.
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, some individuals are of the opinion to be given the freedom to construct and
design
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 the building to their choice.
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 would make them to more proactive and utilise their skills which eventually would give them job satisfaction.
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example my
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example, my
 cousin who is an engineer constructed a building project in our community putting in place attractive designs. Today it's noted as a remarkable place for fun fair for children and adults. In conclusion, building properties in urban areas managed by
government
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are well taken
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is well taken
 care of. I opined that individuals who finance the building construction should be at liberty to
design
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 it as wished.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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