IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 8

You have heard that one of your friends will be doing voluntary work at a festival. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter ask about what type of festival your friend is volunteering at and when and where it will take place ask what your friend will have to do as part of the voluntary work ask if the organisers are still looking for more volunteers and how you can apply for the work

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Dear Zienna, Hope you are doing great! I got to know you are volunteering at a festival, I could imagine how much of a thrilling experience will it be to be a part of the backstage team.
However
, I'm unsure about what festival is it and where is it being held.
Also
, what are the dates for the event?
Further
, I'm curious about your role as a crew member. I
have had
Verb problem
apply
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volunteered at the Canbury Stadium for Taylor's music concert
last
 year;
therefore
, I know the main duty is to ensure that the code of conduct is being followed by all.
Additionally
, cleaning up the equipment and maintenance of the venue is crucial. I would love to accompany you backstage at the event. Do you think the organisers are accepting more applications from volunteers? If yes, can I apply online or do I need to hand over my portfolio in person? Looking forward to hearing back from you. Kind regards, Mehak
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Coherence & Cohesion
Try to aim for one main idea per paragraph to improve coherence.
Task Achievement
Consider expanding on questions about the festival to provide a more complete response.
Coherence & Cohesion
The greeting and closing are very appropriate and friendly, setting the right tone for a letter to a friend.
Task Achievement
The writing tone is communicative and well-suited for an informal letter to a friend.
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