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Some people believe that we cannot learn anything from the past for our life today, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information to understand human life. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, with some people,
history
 is not important
as
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at
 all, they said that the story in the past leaves the past, we do not have to care about it.
However
, others show special opinion about the extent how important the
history
 is, so today I am gonna to discuss both views and share my own knowledge about
history
. On the one hand,
history
 might not useful in the
present but
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present, but
 we can learn many things in the past and avoid it to happen again.
For instance
, the
battle ship
large and heavily armoured warship
battleship
 of the U.S today inspired to a
pirates
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pirate
pirates'
 boat since the 18th century and the tallest building in the world
also
 inspired from a tree which was
extincted
no longer in existence; lost or especially having died out leaving no living representatives
extinct
 thirty years ago. Humans can plug out a lesson for them and for their kids, the lesson which
teach
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teaches
 us how humans were born. But
on the other hand
, like Bill Gate just said:' If we do not have a time machine, so
history
 might be a
tools
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tool
 for us to travel through the past.'
That is
 true, and
moreover
, it
also
 helps us to know more about some heroes who saved the country out of the enemies, we know them so that we can imitate them to do
better
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good
 works, just like them. In conclusion, I strongly agree with
history
 should impact more and more to everyone, it is a valuable source of information to understand human life from the past and
also
 the heroes. The government have to encourage pupils to learn more
history
to
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of
 fostering them the knowledge, from that they will plug out the lesson for themselves.
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