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Why do people celebrate events like weddings and birthdays?

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Introduction
The past few decades have seen an increasing frequency of people celebrating memorable events or occasions like graduation ceremonies, weddings, and birthdays. The principal reasons for
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 trend are twofold.
Body paragraph 1
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 of all, people nowadays have more savings to spend on celebrations - which normally associate with recreational activities like parties, dancing, or group meal - while our predecessor needed every piece of a penny on living essentials
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 as foods or clothes. As the productivity of the entire world rises and machinery takes over most of the production processes, we, humankind, are able to relieve ourselves from fighting for foods and chase leisure activities
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.
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, since they are undoubtedly the happiest moments in our life, celebrating weddings, birthdays, and other similar events have become reasonable.
Body paragraph 2
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 and even more importantly, though, celebrating special occasions creates shared memories among families and friends, which is vital for us since we are social animals. The same memories of special moments that we share with family members or friends will become topics anytime we meet each other in the future and will be the bond that significantly improves relationships among us. It is irrefutable that the milestones of our life,
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 as graduation, marriage, birth would be the perfect moments to hold the mentioned-above celebrations. Celebrations,
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, like a strong and vital glue that sticks the whole society together.
Conclusion
By way of conclusion, having the ceremonies for special events in our life is not only one of the methods that humans use to relax, but
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 vital for us to maintain the connection with our loved ones.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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