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In recent years some countries have experienced very rapid economic development. This has resulted in much higher standards of living in urban areas but not in the countryside. This situation may bring some problems for the country as a whole. What are these problems? How might they be reduced? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words. PROBLEMS - SOLVING

#years #countries #development #standards #areas #countryside #situation #country
With
rapid economic development standard
Suggestion
the rapid economic development standard
 of living in urban areas have
increased but
Accept comma addition
increased, but
 same is not true for
countryside
Suggestion
the countryside
.
This
 can be a severe problem for the whole country which can be discussed in the following para. With increased development in
uban
relating to or concerned with a city or densely populated area
urban
 areas more and more people from
countyside
Suggestion
the countryside
countryside
 will migrate there in search of jobs.
This
 will lead to
erractic increae
Suggestion
an erratic increase
erractic increase
erratic increase
erractic increases
erratic increae
 in
population creating
Accept comma addition
population, creating
 a mismatch in demand and supply of goods and services. Another problem is widening of
gap
Suggestion
the gap
 between rich and poor.
This
 problem can be solved with an initiative by the government by improving the infrastructure of countryside which will ultimately increase the employment opportunities in that area.
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