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In many countries today, the average weight of people is increasing. What has led to this situation? What can be done to solve it?

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Nowadays, obesity is a highly increasing issue among people.
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 trend is mainly due to excess consumption of junk
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 and a sedentary
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.
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, several measures could be implemented to solve
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 problem. One imperative cause behind gaining weight dramatically amongst people is too much consumption of fast
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. As leading busy in the office people usually have to rely more on processed packaged
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. The more use of fast
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, more obese people will become.
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, obesity leads to many health issues eventually people have to suffer it in the form of illness. To exemplify, in a family, both husband and wife are employed, which means that they are not able to cook
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 at home, and in order to not defer at the workplace they eat preserved
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. To tackle
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 problem, the government should raise tax on
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 products so that it would not be affordable for people to buy.
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, home-made
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 will be given
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 priority. A sedentary
lifestyle
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 is another major reason for overweight. Because sometimes people tend to work longer hours to achieve companies target as well as to have a decent
lifestyle
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, meaning that no time for
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.
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, the augmenting number of people are becoming overweight. To find a solution to
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 problem, people must incorporate
exercise
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 in their daily routine as work life.
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, in Japan, companies do not allow to work employees unless they have 35 inches and 30 inch waist for male and female respectively. For getting jobs it is indispensable for the Japanese to maintain their health that requires daily
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 and some leisure activities. It has resulted in them to be fit and healthy. In conclusion, obesity often stems from the huge consumption of junk foods and a sedentary
lifestyle
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. Only when the government raise taxes on processed, packaged
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 and people involve some
exercise
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 in everyday life, will the issue be fully resolved.
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