In many Countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of Crime? How can we deal with those causes?

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In the recent
decad
a period of 10 years
decade
decades
, crime has been
increased
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increasing
rapidly different parts of the
worl
everything that exists anywhere
world
work
wall
. There are many reasons behind
this
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situatio
the general state of things; the combination of circumstances at a given time
situation
.
Form
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From
my
pointof
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point of
view,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
think the main causes are lack of proper education as well as less opportunities for suitable
employmen
the state of being employed or having a job
employment
. Now a
days
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day
we can observe that young people are most involved in the violation
activitie
any specific behavior
activity
. Children
learns
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learn
are learning
the ethical responsibility from family and
schoo
an educational institution
school
schools
. Parents are so busy
for
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in
earning that they
dont
do not
don't
even get time to spend time with the kids.
As a result
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, the
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
feel lonely and gets
involve
Suggestion
involved
with different types of crimes like drugs, gambling because of the peer
pressur
the force applied to a unit area of surface; measured in pascals (SI unit) or in dynes (cgs unit)
pressure
. They
also
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learn different types of prohibited activities from the internet or tv programmes as the parents do not know what are they actually doing with the gadget. Lack of proper employment opportunity is another reason for increasing the crime. After
completed
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completing
the higher studies, if the
per
a person who is of equal standing with another in a group
peer
pair
can not get a proper job
then
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there is
high possibility
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a high possibility
to involve in crimes just to earn money and remove the so called unemployed title from them
selve
your consciousness of your own identity
selves
self
. So I think if the parents just give a little bit extra time to their kids and teach them about the value of life
then
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the amount of crimes will be
decrease
Suggestion
decreased
. If the government of the country
look
Suggestion
looks
after the job market and try to create proper opportunities for the young people through giving them technical
training
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training, then
then
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it will be
also
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beneficial for the growth of the nation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic disparity
  • propensity
  • recidivism
  • deterrent
  • rehabilitative
  • judicial system
  • corruption
  • socioeconomic
  • alienation
  • stigmatization
  • decriminalization
  • enforcement
  • gentrification
  • preemptive measures
  • intervention strategies
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