Some people believe that women should play an equal role as men in a country’s police or military force, such as the army, while others think women are not suitable for these kinds of jobs. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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an equal role

women should perform duties in d

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(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies

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others opine that military services are not suitable for women.

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(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies

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essay will discuss both views. It is widely accepted that if women are doing jobs into military s

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will decrease the sense of inequality to a large extent. Sometimes, restrictions on some profession on the basis of gender, leads to decrease the

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, agrees that women should be given equal roles in order to increase their

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in the USA indicates that women are now more confident because females are now highly accepted in military services.

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in the army and police. They add that serving in the army is relatively difficult and

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women cannot survive problems while serving these services.

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, women’s body structure is quite different than men ones as army men perform duties in harsh conditions.

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, they believe that women are not suitable for these jobs. To sum up, people are divided over whether women should serve d

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defence

services or not.

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, I firmly believe that as long as we are careful to keep in mind the importance of equality, women should serve in defence services.

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Some people believe that women should play an equal role as men in a country’s police or military force, such as the army, while others think women are not suitable for these kinds of jobs. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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