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The range of technology available to people is increasing the gap between the rich and the poor. Others think it has an opposite effect. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

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Technology
 is growing
day
 by
day
 and it's easily available around the globe which is raising bars between
wealthy
Suggestion
wealth
 and poverty-
striken
grievously affected especially by disease
stricken
.
This
 essay argues
this
 statement because
technology
 helps
underpriviliged
lacking the rights and advantages of other members of society
underprivileged
 people to grow and raise
there
of them or themselves
their
 standard of living. Poor people are not much aware about
technology
 due to which they are not able to work on many things and now-a-days everything is evolving on the basis of
technology
 and
this
 causes
rise
Suggestion
a rise
 in
gap
Suggestion
the gap
 between rich and poor people. Now-a-days
technology
 is changing
day
 by
day
 and through which people can show
there
of them or themselves
their
 hidden talent and enhance it
also
 by learning it. Many free resources are available on
internet to learn in
Suggestion
the internet to learn
the internet to learn in
 different ways and languages which help people to learn and they can earn good money and raise
there
of them or themselves
their
 living standard.
For example
 - Sudharam belongs to a poor family and he to build a cycle which uses water as fuel
instead
 of any oil and he grabbed knowledge regarding
this
 on
internet
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the internet
 and showcased it on
youtube
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YouTube
 through which he got a call from a big
Japenese
of or relating to or characteristic of Japan or its people or their culture or language
Japanese
 MNC. By and large
,
Accept space
,
I strongly believe that
technology
 is playing
vital role
Suggestion
a vital role
 in reducing poverty and helping people to enhance
there
of them or themselves
their
 social and intellectual skills.
Technology
 is responsible for increasing living standard and
growing financially
Accept comma addition
growing, financially
 of people.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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