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Some people think it is the responsibility of governments to take care of the environment, while others believe that it is the responsibility of people to take care of the environment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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During the
last
 decades, environmental
degradation
 has been recognized as a principal challenge.
Although
, some individuals think it is the
government
’s responsibility to protect and revamp the
environment
, it is a personal responsibility for each person in the others view. I,
however
, believe that with contributing between the
government
 and people the environmental
degradation
 can be reduced. On the one hand, the principle responsibility as a cure-all for protecting the
environment
 should be planned by the
government
. Defining restriction for farmers using chemical fertilizers and pesticides which is very hard on the
environment
 and
also
 can lead to soil erosion, and
likewise
, controlling industries to use environmental-friendly equipment that can reduce waste and minimize pollution, can be recognized as sustained solutions by the
government
.
For instance
, replacing fossil fuel with renewable energy sources
such
 as solar energy can result in reducing greenhouse gas, which is one of the most threatening factors in degrading the
environment
.
On the other hand
,
however
, people can play a significant role in preventing the
environment
degradation
 by optimal using of energy. Optimal uses and respecting the
environment
 should be educated to people, especially the new generation by environmentalist in the frame of workshop or educational clips. As an example, Improving the public knowledge about endangered species and defining effective issues in reducing deforestation and desertification by academics and teachers in the universities or schools and
also
 the way of separating any leftover materials that make the recycling process more easy, can be environmentally-friendly helps from people. To sum up, preventing environmental
degradation
 is not an issue which solves by just the
government
 or people. In my opinion, I totally believe, a strong collaboration between the
government
 and people is needed to take care of the
environment
.
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