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Some people believe the Internet is the most important invention in modern history. Do you agree or disagree?

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Various inventions have shaped the
world
 in a way we see it as of today.
However
,
invention
Suggestion
the invention
 of the Internet is given the utmost importance due to its effect on today’s
world
.
As a result
, it has divided the society
in
Suggestion
into
 two parts because certain people believe that
Internet
Suggestion
the Internet
 deserves the importance over the other inventions whereas, other people feel quite the opposite of it. In my opinion, I completely agree with the fact that the internet is the most significant finding till date. There are a number of reasons why people consider the Internet as
blessing
Suggestion
a blessing
.
Firstly
, it has brought the
world
 closer and people are able to communicate with each other instantly.
For example
, now it only takes
couples
Suggestion
a couple
couple
 of seconds to send or receive a message to someone in the other
country whereas,
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country, whereas
 earlier it will take
couple
Suggestion
a couple
 of months if sent via letter. In my opinion, all communication will come at a halt if the Internet is
shutdown
Suggestion
shut down
 and the
world
 would be affected adversely. Apart from faster communication, the Internet is able to provide a platform where, bundles of data could be stored and easily accessed by anyone around the
world
.
As a result
, people
are are
a unit of surface area equal to 100 square meters
are
 able to know about the various events happening around the
world
 which was not possible before.
Furthermore
, with the help of those bundles of data many scientists were able to gather data that led to great scientific discoveries.
For example
, when Africa was hit with Ebola in 2016, doctors and scientists in America were able to gather the
data
Accept comma addition
data, such
such
 as its effect and cause available on the Internet resulting in the finding the cure to completely eradicate the disease. The Internet has led to effective communication and has brought the
world
 closer in a way in which one had never imagined.
World
Suggestion
The world
 has witnessed various substitutes of
inventions but
Accept comma addition
inventions, but
 never has and never will witness the substitute of the Internet.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • unparalleled
  • revolutionized
  • democratized
  • vast databases
  • tremendous
  • constraints
  • virtually eliminated
  • real-time
  • transformed
  • advancements
  • challenges
  • privacy issues
  • cybercrimes
  • dependence
  • significant
  • equally transformative
  • paved the way
  • profound
  • consume
  • social movements
  • public opinion
  • political landscapes
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