some people believe that children should learn how to cook and prepare food in their lessons. what is your opinion about that.

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Needless to say,
children
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children's
health is getting deteriorating owing to various factors,
that is
the reasons, an idea has been proposed by many that students should have the knowledge about
food
in regards to growing and cooking.
This
essay agrees
to
Suggestion
with
the
statemnet
a message that is stated or declared; a communication (oral or written) setting forth particulars or facts etc
statement
and outlines the factors why it should be taught in schools. The
first
and the foremost reason to consider is why knowledge about growing should be imparted is that it has been globally witnessed that due to intensive farming, crops are being grown with the help of chemicals and pesticides and sometimes genetically modified
food
is
avaliable
obtainable or accessible and ready for use or service
available
in the market, which is having
diect
command with authority
direct
detrimental effects on one's health in respect to physical and mental
wellbeing
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well being
of students which ultimately hampers the nation's progress. If children are made aware about it and taught how to grow organic
food
items, it would encourage them to eat healthy items.
hence
(used to introduce a logical conclusion) from that fact or reason or as a result
Hence
, it would be win- win situation for all, including parents, nation and children themselves. Apart from growing, how to prepare
food
should
also
be included in their academic subjects. It is unfortunate to say that trends of
intaking
junk
food
is prevailing
Suggestion
are prevailing
these days
,
Accept space
,
especially among the children since their parents seem to be
workaholic
Suggestion
workaholics
resulting in less time to prepare
food
.
This
is the most obvious reason why children are falling prey to diseases
such
as obesity, high blood pressure and
many
Suggestion
much
more, if learning about cooking is mandatory, it would surely
proove
be shown or be found to be
prove
proved
proven
beneficial for
thenm
objective case of they
them
as they might be able to opt homemade
food
than outside. Ultimately
,
Accept space
,
it would develop healthy eating
habitswhich
Suggestion
habits which
could lead towards healthy and prosperous nation.
Conclusivey
Suggestion
Conclusively
, indeed it is a true fact that due to unhealthy lifestyle, if children are made aware about growing and preparing
food
, it would really be conducive.

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