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Nowadays, traffic is becoming a global issue. What are its causes and effects? How can it be controlled?

#traffic #effects
These days, people are becoming victims of
traffic
hazards not
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hazards, not
 only in developing countries but
also
 in developed ones.
Traffic
 is caused by immense reasons and it has adverse results not only on
environment
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the environment
 but
also
 on human health. In my opinion, some stringent steps should be taken to alleviate
this
 issue. A number of factors are responsible for
this
problem
. I think the chief among them is excessive use of private vehicles. Most of the roads in urban areas are brimming with private vehicles which cause
traffic
 congestion.
Furthermore
, people are unaware of
traffic
 rules and regulations and as a consequence the
problem
 is becoming worse. Needless to say that, poor road condition and narrow roads lead to
traffic
. No one can deny the detrimental effects brought about by
traffic
 on the environment and human health.
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One
 of the adverse effects of
this
problem
 is pollution. In other words, air pollution invites respiratory problems like asthma and lung cancer and noise pollution causes deafness. Another negative consequence posed by
this
problem
 is wastage of time and fuel.
Besides
, the
problem
 of
traffic
is getting
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gets
 worse day by day.
Consequently
, it increases chances of accident on
roads
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the roads
. As far as my opinion is concerned, some steps should be initiated to overcome the
problem
 of
traffic
 by
traffic
 authorities, individuals and governments. One of the most advisable panaceas for preventing
traffic
 is that government should improve facilities of public transportation with a view to attracting people for using it. Apart from
this
, organizing
traffic
 awareness programs can be the best way to control the situation.
Last
 but not least, to maintain the road condition is the advisable solution in order to mitigate the worst situation caused by
traffic
. To reiterate my views, I would like to say that is not only the responsibility of the government and
traffic
 authority but
also
 individuals to restrain
this
 issue. With the help of collective efforts, it can be combated.
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