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Some people say holding sport competitions can cause problems for the host country, other disagree. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

#people #sport #competitions #host #country
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In the human history so far,
sport
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 is getting more importance.
Sport
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 is an essential part in the entertainment
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. Each
country
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 wants to prove that they are strong in sports and to prove that, they are working hard.
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sport
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 can unite the nation. Other shortcomings of the nations, people forget and unite for the
country
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. Holding
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 competition is the byproduct of being active in the
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. As a coin has always 2 sides, there are the drawbacks and good parts
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. I strongly believe that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of holding
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 competitions in the
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. When
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 host any
sport
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 competition there is lots of income and foreign transactions tend to happen, which brings foreign currency in the
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.
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, all the world is attracted to that
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 event, indirectly attracted towards the
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.
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, it can improve the
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’s name and fame in front of the world. Another view is that, hosting the
sport
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 events in the
country
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 can cause multiple problems like corruption, politics etc. When money is involved, these things tend to happen. But if the whole
country
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 unites and try not to happen,
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 things,
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 these problems can easily get solved. And we as a
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 can focus on the brighter side of
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 events. So in my opinion, I strongly believe that,
sport
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 competitions are required to happen, and man-made problems can be removed by collectively having efforts in it.
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