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Some people say holding sport competitions can cause problems for the host country, other disagree. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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In the human history so far,
sport
 is getting more importance.
Sport
 is an essential part in the entertainment
also
. Each
country
 wants to prove that they are strong in sports and to prove that, they are working hard.
Also
sport
 can unite the nation. Other shortcomings of the nations, people forget and unite for the
country
. Holding
sport
 competition is the byproduct of being active in the
sport
. As a coin has always 2 sides, there are the drawbacks and good parts
also
. I strongly believe that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of holding
sport
 competitions in the
country
. When
country
 host any
sport
 competition there is lots of income and foreign transactions tend to happen, which brings foreign currency in the
country
.
Also
, all the world is attracted to that
sport
 event, indirectly attracted towards the
country
.
Hence
, it can improve the
country
’s name and fame in front of the world. Another view is that, hosting the
sport
 events in the
country
 can cause multiple problems like corruption, politics etc. When money is involved, these things tend to happen. But if the whole
country
 unites and try not to happen,
such
 things,
then
 these problems can easily get solved. And we as a
country
 can focus on the brighter side of
such
 events. So in my opinion, I strongly believe that,
sport
 competitions are required to happen, and man-made problems can be removed by collectively having efforts in it.
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